PHOTO PROMPT © Roger Bultot for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers
I lived in that house once. The family home. The yard immaculately kept. What have they done to my grounds? Weeds dominate the cracks in the pavement. Vines intertwine creating nature’s rope from the second floor to ground. Do they know their teenage daughter climbs down the leaf ladder in a micro-mini and push-up? Underwear optional… Makes even a dead man’s heartbeat. The boyfriends never last. An axe and a homicidal grin usually does the trick. An antic influenced by my brother. Must protect what is mine; the girl, the garden. Here she comes. Damn the bush needs trimming.
Dear Tanille,
Oh, this one sent chills racing down my spine. You’ve captured the voice of a psychopath. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks Rochelle. A fun write. 😀
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I’m reading this as being narrated by a ghost, but I may be wrong
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You are correct! Probably not obviously clear.
Thanks Neil!
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What a chilling voice!!
Amazing! 😀
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Very chilling, yes! Loved this story
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Thanks Neel!
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The teenage daughter must wonder what she keeps doing wrong with all the boyfriends she brings home! Creepy tale.
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Maybe Mr Creepy will reveal himself.
Thanks Iain!
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With a ghost and a homicidal maniac, this is a scary place. Good writing, Tannille. 🙂 — Suzanne
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Might be worth exploring more.
Thanks Suzanne!
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There is something about this picture that brought ghosts to my mind, but not a psychopathic one! Good creepy job!
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Must admit I started with a ghost in mind but a pervert took me by surprise lol.
Thanks Eugenia!
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A psychopathic ghost. The very worst kind, I think 🙂 Really well -written.
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Thank you. I imagine he’s quite the character.
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I saw it as a ghost, too. Creepy, but effective, beautiful writing.
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Thank you 😀. I think a fair few of us saw a ghost or too. Perhaps it’s the lighting that sets the mood?
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This is seriously threatening. Well written
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Thanks Liz. Glad to evoke the threatening emotion. Hmm that sounds kind of creepy lol.
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eerie! Love it!
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Thanks Jelli!
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The deadman comment gave us a hint, but that could be said by anyone. My question is, who is this brother? And I’m definitely hoping the axe is ghostly as well.Little tramp doesn’t deserve this!
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I would like to explore this story more. Not entirely sure. The ghost protagonist was killed by his homicidal brother (that was in my mind as I wrote the story).
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Like Hamlet’s father’s ghost!
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Protected by a ghost… This was well done, Tannille.
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Thanks Dale! I think of the ghost as a protector as well. He’s a complex character 😀.
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Nice story. Many layers. Someone thinks girl is his, and chases away her boy friends. But does the girl know his existence?
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My initial thought is she doesn’t know, but it might make a more interesting twist if she did!
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These ghosts have to learn to let go… 🙂
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But he’s bored and having so much fun!
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That’s one wicked ghost. The last line was hilarious. 😀
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Glad someone got the… um… double meaning lol.
Thanks Varad!
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A green fingered ghost. It should write a book.
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I believe he should 😁
Thanks Patrick!
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Ooh, a shivery story! Great job!
Ronda
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Thanks Ronda!
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i think like all other ghosts, she lives in the past while the world passes her by.
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Can’t argue with that logic 😀.
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I fliped at the end, wondering what bush you mean?
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Well that would be telling…
I’ll leave that up to the reader lol.
Thanks James!
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Creepy story. Nicely done.
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Thanks Jo!
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As they say, you can never go home again, not even a ghost. Chilling tale I really enjoyed.
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Thanks Brenda.
Think this ghost might stick to the garden.
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A grim set-up, and a very creepy narrator. Not sure if I was supposed to chuckle about his equating axe murdering with pruning the bushes, but I did anyway. Good story.
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That’s my warped muse coming out lol.
Thanks Margaret!
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Well, if you gotta be dead.. At least he has something fun to occupy his time.
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