PHOTO PROMPT © Dale Rogerson for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers. Other stories featuring the prompt can be found here.
The children were told to stay indoors. Not safe to wander. A shadow cloaked the sun. The atmosphere crackled. The invaders close. The vanishing time.
Only speculation rotated; same say alien experiments, others claim planets need populating, or more gruesome, aliens need to eat. One fact unshaken: children didn’t come home.
At first, the police hounded every known and potential paedophile, no avail. Psychics stepped forward and were treated as criminals for inciting mass hysteria. Children continued to disappear, the lighting always the same.
This time different; one of the missing returned – found in a daze at the same park he disappeared from decades earlier.
I hope the parents had taken out alien abduction insurance. Nice little horror, Tannilla.
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Now there is an idea!
Thanks N!
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Dear Tanille,
You left me wanting to know more. This reads like the beginning of a larger story. Well done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I have a feeling one day I will work on an alien large story, my muse is starting to go there.
Thanks Rochelle!
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You’re welcome, Tanille. By all means, you should go there. 😉 (In a literary manner)
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Hopefully the first step towards a solution. Interesting!
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Yeah not sure where this one is heading. 😀
Thanks K!
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This does sound like a good beginning for an alien story, Tannille. I’m wondering if the child had aged for stayed a child. At least no one’s being eaten as far as we know. Well done. 🙂 — Suzanne
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My mum asked about that too. She saw a child, I saw an adult. But nothing is stated so who knows. A child might be more interesting?
Thanks S!
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Most intriguing!
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Thank you 😀!
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Oh, I want to know the “whole” story, now. Great shorty teaser! Loved it!
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Might have to slip this on the “revisit” pile. 😀
Thanks B!
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Decades later …. still a child? It leaves so much to imagination.
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That’s the question. I should take votes on it 😀. I saw an adult others a kid (might be more interesting…)
Thanks R!
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🙂
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Intriguing.
And similar in concept to the start of my e-book, The Second Request
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Ooo that sounds interesting! Is it on Amazon?
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It is, yes.
You can find it here: https://www.amazon.com/s?k=ce+ayr&i=digital-text&ref=nb_sb_noss
It was written back in 2014 and set in an independent Scotland in the near future.
It should be set at minimum price.
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A brooding piece, full of possibilities.
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Keeping it to about 100 words a challenge.
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Prologue to the story of the one who returned ten years later. . . .what an intriguing story!
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The real question is the returned a child or adult?
Thanks L!
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Intriguing chiller, and suits the photo perfectly 🙂
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The lighting triggered me. Reminded we of an eclipse, then muse suggested a spaceship blocking the sun and the way it went 😀.
Thanks I!
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Love the poetic first paragraph, reminds me a little of the start of Roald Dahl’s the BFG, but with a sci-fi twist.
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I blame the lightning in the pic 😀. I read the BFG and temped to read the start now (I don’t remember it, how shameful)!
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Well then … I’m awaiting chapter 2 … 😉
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Might see what I can do. 😀
Thanks N!
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🙂
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it looks like the child didn’t meet the specs so he had to be returned. 🙂
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‘No good, spit him back’ 😀
I’m not sure on the reasoning tbh.
Thanks P!
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Oooohhh… This was great!
Want more!
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I think I might have to revisit the story 😀.
Thanks D!
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I think you should, T!
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Wow. Superb take on the prompt. I haven’t done Friday Fictioneers but now am tempted to join in. Came here from Iain Kelly’s page who does the FF posts too.
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Give it a go. Lots of fun and everyone is lovely.
Thanks for your kind comment 😀.
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Yeek! I hope the returnee can shed some light on it. Very creepy atmosphere, nice 🙂
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I’d say there are discoveries to be made.
Thanks D!
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Eerie story – I’d be keeping my children close.
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Good parents do. Unfortunately there are those that don’t care.
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I wonder why that one came back – or was sent back? Maybe the start of something even worse…
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That’s the mystery 😀.
Thanks P!
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Feels like there is more to come, Stephen (King). 😉 😀
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Now if only I could make the millions 😀.
Thanks S!
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I know, right?!
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Eerie and clinical. Reminds me of the description I heard on the radio, of a rape victim, who described her attack down to the last detail but without emotion, without value judgment. It made the police suspect she was at least lying and possibly even up to no good, herself. I get the same feeling from this narrator.
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How awful for the victim. Some victims disassociate. A protective mechanism. Just as some laugh in the most inappropriate moments.
Thanks A!
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