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Flash Fiction: On the Run

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PHOTO PROMPT © Mikhael Sublett for Rochelle’s Friday Fictioneers. Other stories featuring the prompt can be found here.

 

In the chill of the night, they fled. Lightning shook the charming, yet average house. Glass shattering, the booming noise waking all in confusion. The last of any peaceful slumber for moons to come.

The wolves entered first, leaving no picture frame unturned. Their noses sniffing for any scent, operating on orders to hunt and kill. The pack found the empty bedrooms – windows opened, curtains flapping in the wind. No sight of the family. Their fear lingered in the air. Sometimes psychological terror had to be enough. Tomorrow another day and the phoenix couldn’t hide forever.

 

Note: Story is set in my mythological novel world. The lightning came from Lighting Birds and the wolves are shapeshifting Guardians. 

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  9. This is a really good dark, high-tension piece.

    I agree with a few of the other comments. I understand the desire to stay locked in the world you’re creating, but with a few minor tweaks, there would be no explanation necessary.

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  13. Good suspense in this story. I think the story stands alone without the footnote. The phoenix is important because it shows unequivocally that the story is set in a different world. If this were part of the opening of a novel you wouldn’t want to tell about the phoenix, or about shapeshifting guardians in the form of wolves – you’d want to show by what happened.

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