
The lamp shines in the park, like the sun on a summer’s day.
The artificial rays, gold and bright, keep the shadows away.
A child skips, humming a tune, home waiting ahead.
The glow flickers, whispering all the nightmares she’s read.
Doe eyed, her vision strains into the dark.
As a snap echoes throughout the icy park.
“Who’s there?” Her shaky words meet with silence.
A shadow looms, threatening blood and violence.
The lamb spirits towards the light, monster in toe.
She turns around, all that’s left, footsteps in the snow.
This was excellent, both in storytelling and atmosphere, and as a poem. Well done.
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Thanks I, it took a bit of time. 😀
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This sounds very sinister. You created a very intense atmosphere.
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It may have been her imagination. All the same she freaked.
Thanks S!
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Dear Tannille,
Ominously well written poem.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks R. Poetry usually isn’t my thing. 😀
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Yes! Our fears do make monsters out of lambs
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They certainly do. Our brains usually create the biggest fears.
Thanks N!
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Very atmospheric.
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Thanks T! 😀
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A chilling tale. The mind can play cruel tricks sometimes. Well done Tannille.
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Our brains can be our biggest enemy!
Thanks K!
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Oh, you take me back over 65 years to a few walks home from the park across the street! “Always come back the minute the street lights go on! Never go alone! Never go through that area where the men are drinking! Never talk to strangers. Have fun!”
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And run! I remember being a child and getting spooked out for no reason. Parks can be lively or creepy. I bet you have some fantastic stories. Kids had more freedom in the past.
Thanks L!
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We certainly had more freedom than kids seem to have today. We also didn’t have the electronic entertainment to keep us inside. It was good.
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Sometimes our imaginations are our worst enemies. Good story.
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Especially creative people, I think. We’re always in our heads.
Thanks J 😀
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You’re welcome!
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Haunting. I think we can all relate to that particular frisson at some point in our lives. Nice one, T. It’s not easy to write a story that rhymes and makes sense.
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Actually I didn’t know what to write. Came up with the first two lines, wow that rhymes. Wrote the last line next… what rhymes with snow… Oh bingo. Took it from there and filled the middle.
Maybe The Cotton Candy Monster rode Disco Pony and they were stalking her?
Thanks N
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I don’t know. All that butt light might be a dead giveaway.
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Wonderful, Tannille! And in a poem, no less. Wonderful atmosphere, you’ve created. I do hope all was in her imagination…
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I’m not sure why the muse spat out a poem. I’m not sure if the footsteps were hers or someone else’s. Beautiful picture you provided this week.
Thanks D!
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No matter… I’m rather glad you did.
And thank you! 🙂
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Ooh, what an atmospheric poem! We’ve all been that child, I suspect, when the dark and the light play their tricks. So well told.
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Not to mention how creepy and isolated parks can look at night. 👻
Thanks J!
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Spooky and suspenseful, and that close call with the monster, a little too close.
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The shadow’s still lurks for another time. She gets home safe.
Thanks D!
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Love that, what a classy poem. I understood the monster in tow to be the lamb’s shadow. Do I win a prize? Good stuff
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Haha, will you settle for a gold star ⭐️? In my mind, it’s up to reader if the shadow man is real or not.
Thanks Shrawley!
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Brrrr…. this was spooooooky! Well done poem and pacing! 🙂
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Thanks N, the story isn’t my usual style. Poetry scares me a bit, but after the first two lines unintentionally rhymed I went with it.
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It rolled along well! 🙂
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I can imagine the imagination running amok in a dark snowy park 🙂
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Even as an adult!
Thanks D
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From peace to the fear of violence in one walk – well written.
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I think we’ve all felt this at some point in our lives.
Thanks L!
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i wanted to believe it was just her imagination playing tricks here. yes, i wanted to believe.
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For her sake, yes!
Thanks P
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The imagination can be a very powerful thing. Am happy that she’s safe, though.
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Absolutely. We would be lost without it.
Thanks N
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I’m not sure if it helps me to like this story better or not, but I love a well-cooked lamb. Sinister because it’s a human child. But tasty if lamp chops, all fried up with some rosemary. So, it depends on your perspective? I haven’t had lamb/mutton in so long.
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Lamb use to be what everyone ate in Australia, now only the affluent can afford lamb. Meat is kind of barbaric in general, I’m torn. It’s nature, cats and dogs will aways need to eat.
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Great atmosphere. I love that even a gentle creature like a lamb could take on a more sinister character in imagination.
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Wolf in sheep’s clothing perhaps 😀
Thanks S
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Chilling!
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Thanks S! 😀
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Well done. I like the images.
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Thanks A!
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Great poetry with accumulating menace and tension.
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Thanks J!😀
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Imagination can be a great thing, you took it to a very high level
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We human’s a are emotional creatures.
Thanks M
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