
Note:
I wrote this gem back in March 2018. Inspiration came from a prompt game on my phone; every three minutes a new prompt is given to add to the story. We play the game a fair bit in my writers’ group. Results are always hit or miss, but always fun in a word puzzle sort of way. This week’s picture reminded me of this story – and I don’t have time to wait for the muse to turn up. Oh look she waves from the platform.
For those interested the original prompts were;
Takes place in a train station
Prisoner
A bridge
Add a character who wears an amulet
“What are you laughing at?”
“I don’t like the colour green.”
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The train station howled with the wind. The last train stopped a century earlier. A prisoner of time. Layers of graffiti hid the white bricks. The edging of the platform crumbling. A stone bridge shadowed the tracks, leading back to civilisation. Only the daring visited the ruins.
A figure walks into the forgotten. Her hands clipped the scarf at her throat, concealing her amulet from the world.
“What are you laughing at?”
She rolled her eyes. Did the dead have nothing better to do?
The spirit hissed.
“The colour green is offensive.”
“No shiz, it’s the colour of life.”
Even spooks were in on political correctness. The bodily challenged have rights, you know.
Dear Tanille,
There’s nothing wrong with bringing back an oldie but a goodie. This is definitely a goodie. Timeless.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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Thanks R. Sometimes the prompts trigger old stories. Hard to write something new when that happens.
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Loved “bodily challenged”
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Maybe they will demand compensation…
Thanks N
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An interesting piece. Very nicely done, Tannille.
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Thanks M! 😀
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This is brilliant, T! So glad you dug it out of your archives for us to enjoy.
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I couldn’t stop seeing the story in my head. 😀
Plus I had a big day…
Thanks D
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No need for excuses! Ya done good 😉
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A great tale from what sounds like a brilliant prompt game!
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After about 6 prompts stories get derailed.All the same, it makes the brain come up with stories one wouldn’t have otherwise.
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Thanks K
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Nice one!
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Thanks J! 😀
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What? No Muse? No fairies? I like that you stepped out of your comfort zone and made a daring visit to the ruins.
The bodily challenged have long had more rights than the rest of us. The easily offended have more rights than anybody. Green is also the color of envy.
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Not even a god!
Ooo good connection with green being the colour of envy. For a fleeting moment, after writing this story, I questioned expanding the story world — a critique on society. But I fear it would feed the trolls. I really should revisit my archives.
Thanks N
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There’s always that hidden gem or two in the archives and trolls waiting to tear into it.
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There’s a story! Leave my gems alone 😀 you troll.
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Dang it! I was hoping to add to my gem collection.
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Gem thief. You stole Disco Pony and now you want my gems. 😀
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But not your germs. Stole? He came over for a play date with the Cotton Candy Monster.
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Girl germs eww. Go hug a tree! Pony now identifies as man?
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I don’t know. I thought pony prefered he/him pronouns. I could be wrong, but how often does that happen.
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A interesting game, Although I would find it hard to do
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The game does get easier with practice. Some times it requires bending the prompts to make them fit.
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Thanks M!
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I’m really glad you revived this for us. Ingenious use of the prompts. That’s a tough exercise, I think.
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Some times one has to be creative with the prompts. Sometimes a prompt will break the story but most of the time the prompt stretches the brain to think outside the box.
Thanks L!
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Bodily challenged… that’s a keeper! 🙂
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I thought so 😀.
Thanks S
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you must have fun writing this story. i truly enjoyed it. 🙂
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Thanks P. A happy dance is due whenever I can create a story with the app.
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Equal rights for dead people!
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Yes! They’ll haunt until no one can sleep!
Thanks A
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Great take on the prompt. You’re good at acerbic dialogue, aren’t you?
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Maybe little too good at it lol.
Thanks P
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This is great. And the prompt game looks inspiring (although it would be too fast for me with three minutes).
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Haha, that why my stories are short. Some of the others write like they are on fire.g
Thanks G
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