
It didn’t look like much, but it was theirs — a place for kids to hang out. No adults allowed. Of course, if the oldies knew about the haunt, they would freak. A danger zone!!!
Kids will be kids. They claimed the derelict building as their clubhouse and spray-painted names on the walls to mark their territory. The children played games, told stories, and always returned home as the sky turned orange-pink — until they didn’t. The minors vanished without a trace, only their paint remained. The blame rested with the parents… dodgy deals were made.
The Pied Piper always comes back for his children.
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Note:
This story is a modern retelling of the famous German fairytale/folklore/historical event, “The Pied Piper’.
Perhaps the Piper has a bong in this updated retelling?
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Why do I like this idea? 😀
Thanks N!
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Dear Tanille,
The thought of the parents selling off their kids is creepy. Although there’ve been times…;) Nicely done.
Shalom,
Rochelle
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I’m sure it crosses every parent’s mind at some point. Only human! 😀
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An exquisite retelling, well done.
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Thanks I! 😀
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Them parents were Rats,
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That’s a really good analogy, maybe the piper comes back and drives the rats/parents out.
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Nice retelling of the Pied Piper tale.
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Thanks F! 😀
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Teenagers are always at risk of dangerous things, but dodgy deals by parents shouldn’t be one of those things. Poor kids 😦
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I’m not sure what the piper did with the kids. I know historically, there is a theory based on evidence, that the kids ended up settling villages in nearby countries. German surnames pop up in records. But the folk tales are very grim. Chilling.
Thanks L!
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You’re welcome, Tannille.
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Hmm… How much are kids going for these days?
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Don’t even think about it… 😀
Stick with your 6 doggy children.
Thanks N
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I already know what they’re going for.
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Your leg…
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Very uneasy ending.
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Thanks S!
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Delightfully dark skew.
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Fairy tales are best when they are dark.
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An imaginative retelling of the Pied Piper folk-tale. I love the idea that he uses an old building covered in graffiti as his ‘bait’. Most kids would find that irresistible.
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Especially a building isolated from the world. I wondered if the piper owned the building? But the word count means stories have to be kept lean.
Thanks P!
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I think I would prefer it if the Piper didn’t own the building. There’s something very alluring about the idea of a penniless musician owning only his pipe and his motley; and wreaking such havoc on conventional society!
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Good point!
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Well conceived retelling and excellent take on the prompt.
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I like it when the stories come with ease.
Thanks B!
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You’re welcome.
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Wonderful story. So inventive and yet it rings true to our times.
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It’s kind of creepy how many fairy tales ring true. We might have technology now days but people are the same.
Thanks M!
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Yikes! 😮
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who knows? the kids maybe in a better place now. 🙂
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That’s the mystery of it. One can only hope.
Thanks P!
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Yep, the Pied Piper reminds us all to honour our agreements. The dirty rat!
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Some people never learn.
Thanks J!
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That old Pied Piper sure gets around, appearing at the most inopportune times 🙂
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He has a skill and isn’t afraid to take advantage.
Thanks L!
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Very creepy, the pied piper or one of his many derivatives always comes back indeed.
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The Pied Piper is a man who keeps his word.
Thanks G!
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